Juniper put her palms against the wall at her back, ready to push off and sprint the dozen feet to the pile of rubble and climb for her life, but something stopped her.
This was a fantastic series, Layne. I was hoping there would be some kind of redemption for Wes, but you just can trust a dude who says "It's ya boy!" . And the oily ghost creature is a really creepy image.
I so appreciate that you would give it a chance! I totally get the desire for redemption, but there had to be a bloody death in there somewhere! I tried to evoke a theme of greed and its costs. Wes was guided by greed, the Staggs brothers were, the stepfather took her time and energy and self respect, even the blood of the dead was like a concentrated form of greed, hungry for souls. Juniper was the only one who didn't want to take from anybody. Btw, I'm glad you like the "monster." It's pretty challenging to come up with something original but still scary. That was my swing at it anyway.
Keith! I so appreciate you reading through this story. This is why I got on Substack--to find an audience. I spent a lot of hours on The Undergrave, so it is great to finally be getting some eyes on it and some feedback. Thank you so much for sharing it with your own followers. I'll be thinking about THAT for a long time.
This was a fantastic series, Layne. I was hoping there would be some kind of redemption for Wes, but you just can trust a dude who says "It's ya boy!" . And the oily ghost creature is a really creepy image.
I so appreciate that you would give it a chance! I totally get the desire for redemption, but there had to be a bloody death in there somewhere! I tried to evoke a theme of greed and its costs. Wes was guided by greed, the Staggs brothers were, the stepfather took her time and energy and self respect, even the blood of the dead was like a concentrated form of greed, hungry for souls. Juniper was the only one who didn't want to take from anybody. Btw, I'm glad you like the "monster." It's pretty challenging to come up with something original but still scary. That was my swing at it anyway.
Man oh man, what an incredible story. I’ll be thinking about this one for a long time.
Keith! I so appreciate you reading through this story. This is why I got on Substack--to find an audience. I spent a lot of hours on The Undergrave, so it is great to finally be getting some eyes on it and some feedback. Thank you so much for sharing it with your own followers. I'll be thinking about THAT for a long time.