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Nick Buchheit's avatar

Lovely twist at the end.

Stephanie Sweeney's avatar

I like what you did with dialogue only here!

Layne Mercer's avatar

Thanks! Something about a booth turns a story into a little play. I probably ended up putting more work into the painting than the story•

Stephanie Sweeney's avatar

Oh it’s great! I didn’t know you painted it!

elie lichtschein 👽🛹's avatar

nice twist and super strong dialogue!! great piece. i love these contests

Layne Mercer's avatar

I appreciate that. It felt like the diner booth just led naturally to a back and forth conversation so I decided to strip it down to that alone. I was kind of channelling a lighter version of some of the stories in the collection Knockemstiff. If you haven’t read it, beware and you’re welcome.

Evan Miller's avatar

Nicely done. Dark and darkly funny.

Brandon North's avatar

Nice, I liked the ending especially. My entry also took advantage of the booth conversation, but mine is all monologue